Redlands first Synopsis evaluation.
From reading through the first draft of my films synopsis, I have found that there was not quite enough of a dilemma. From this I have changed a few details such as how the story will be told; I have made it so the film is from Jacks point of view. By doing this it will add more emotion and the audience will feel his guilt as well as understand the problem more.
I have also made the two friends younger as then we can see why they would want to impress the older boy who is still the older brother who doesn’t want his brother to be around him.
